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PostSubject: Near Comfort   8/31/2008, 4:14 pm




Prolouge.




I dont really remember much about that house. I would often have dreams about it;
usually the same dream.

In my dream Id see a small white house in the distance, trees behind it, and a large
flowery field in front. Id be dancing in the field. Id spin and spin and spin until Id fall
into a patch of white flowers. Sometimes a woman would be there with me, holding
my hands laughing with me as we twirled and sang, Ring around the rosy, a pocket
full of poesy


Id be wearing a yellow sundress, yellow ribbon in my hair, and Id be bare foot.
The woman that I was dancing with was my mother who was thirty years old at the time.
I remember her long beautiful auburn hair blowing in the wind as we danced and her
warm laughter gave me goose bumps; even in my dreams.


I dont remember my father.


One of the only things that I do remember about that house was that I loved it; mostly
the fields that seemed to go on for miles. My mother would tell me as wed lay in the
field, You know, when I was your age Id spend most of my days here in the field, The
house was her parents house before it was ours. I guess that would make them my
grandparents, but Ive never met them as far as I can remember. My mother would hold
my hands and wed spin around and around as we sang. Thats when she taught me the
song, Ring Around the Rosy.

I was only five years old when I had to leave the house.



The only other memory I have of that house was the night that it burned down. I dont
remember how it had burnt down, but it did. My mother died in that fire, along with the
memories of her childhood. I remember that she had saved me and had gotten trapped in
the house trying to get out. The roof had collapsed on her and I dont even think I had
understood what had exactly happened at my young age. I just remember staring at the
flames as they ate away at the small house. In my dreams Id be dancing in the field as
the house burnt down singing, Ring around the rosy, a pocket full of poesy



It feels more like a nightmare than a dream; I do not sleep well those nights.



I live in the city now in a huge brick building at the age of ten. There is lots of other
children my age that lives there as well. They call it an adoption center. Sometimes I go
outside and dance in the small patch of green grass outside near the building, but it isnt
the same and I know that I will never live near the comfort of that small white house ever
again.



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PostSubject: Re: Near Comfort   8/31/2008, 4:18 pm

I like this.
Simple, sorta spooky, and interesting because you don't know that much about whats going on.
I like how you added the picture too for visionary effect.
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PostSubject: Re: Near Comfort   8/31/2008, 4:28 pm

thankies sarah! =D

this was a photography assignment a couple weeks ago to find a photograph that you like and write a short story about it.

so i ended up writing this with that picture and decided that i might write more.

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PostSubject: Re: Near Comfort   8/31/2008, 4:44 pm

Coolio. XD

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